This is from the Daily Post’s Weekly Writing Challenge, to finish a sentence beginning with “I wish I were”:
I wish I were the sun on high
Witness to an eternity
Of twilights falling over Earth
And over humanity
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Myself the roiling light that saw
Darkness take on form
Chaos nursing galaxies
While my body warmed
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Time in another measure,
If I were this planet’s star
My lifespan made tangible
A light-year near and far
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For I would know vast distances
And universal beauties
And after human empire
I would learn what is to be
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© 2012, Elizabeth Cook
Of twilights falling over Earth – love that line!
Thank you!
Wish their was a “LOVE” button too, then i’d press it 20 times!
Haha thank you, that’s a really nice compliment
Truly wonderful. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem with us!
Thank you for the compliment, I’m glad you liked it! Could I ask how you got to that one of my poems in particular? I’m always curious about how people find what they do 🙂
I read many of them, but this one was particularly meaningful because of my very scientificly minded, yet soulful 13 year-old son. He is light years away from his peers on a very dichotomous front: in that he knows very well that he wants to be a child still, although the rest of them are dying not to be. Yet his soul has always seemed old to me somehow reaching from an early age, “what it is to be.” I understand your perspective, as the sun, comes from a more experienced one, yet the imagery is childlike. In reality, what we are underneath all the experience-laden outward signs of life: is a product of our experiences, many of the profound ones being in our early years.
I am currently reading Charles Dickens’ A Christmas Carol to my older children: the ghost of Christmas’ past is the most emotional, most touching in many ways… But I digress.
Look forward to reading more. I love your work!
All best,
CAB
I’m jealous of him, now I wish I had known I wanted to be a child while I was one. Being in a rush to grow up wasn’t fun in the end.
I listen to a recording of A Christmas Carol on long drives now and then 🙂 It is such a great story!
Cheers,
Lily
Hi lly1205. This poem makes me think of time travel lovely. Thanks for liking my poem ‘Concentration’. Best Wishes,The Foureyed Poet
Oh thank you! I was having such thoughts as well 🙂
And it was my pleasure!
Lily
“If I were this planet’s star
My lifespan made tangible
A light-year near and far”BEAUTIFUL!!
Thank you very much, I am glad you enjoyed it!
Lily
profound. metaphysical. wish i were this poem.
Thank you, it was a lot of fun to write 🙂
Lily
I still love this poem so much… ❤
Thank you! It means a lot to know that someone would revisit this post after so long 🙂
Lily