Ageha


Man of the wind, my Ageha

Who in seeing sees from one

A jewel of grey as owl’s wing

From shoulder to skies above

 –

His beauty clad in nomad’s blue

Of the hearts without hearths

He speaks as cruel as he is kind

For his gaze goes sweeping far

 –

He with his splendid, silky halo

A veil bright as summer sun

He has known chains, my Ageha

And his smile is brittle-spun

Still he bends strong and fine

Winter fox in gauze and gold

A magnet in the fire’s glow

His secrets held untold

 –

And in knowing of his end

He is not mine to touch or sway

Man of the wind, my Ageha

On the wind carried away.

 

Tags: Anime, Tamura Yumi, BASARA (Tamura Yumi), Ageha (BASARA), Sarasa (BASARA), Kagero (BASARA), Shinbashi

© 2012 Elizabeth Cook

Inspired by Basara, image from zerochan

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33 comments

    1. I’m really glad you enjoyed it! Afraid I was inspired by someone else’s story, but hopefully this tidbit is all right. And thank you for reading and commenting so often – if I may ask, is there anything you think that I am doing well or that I should change?

  1. I love your form and ways of expression, you have a gift whether learned or natural at least in my eye’s. I comment as I am inspired to do so, therefore I must truly appreciate your works, as far as changing anything well everything changes naturally and as you just noted you were inspired by the story of another, from that you shared your version from your heart. Why change something that is a gift within you it evolves on its own you have the gift use it as you do and enrich our lives with your heart and your love shared. I am flattered that you choose to ask me such a question and at the same time honored. I am just a simple man that appreciates beauty in all its forms. Thank you for the honor and know that my words are from the heart and shared with love. It is obvious you love to write and express yourself very beautifully keep doing what you love and I look forward to the love you share.

    1. Thank you very much for your compliments and feedback. I knew that you were a dedicated reader and you seemed like a good person to ask! Our lives can always do with more beauty and love, which your comment certainly adds to. I’ll try to keep doing what I am doing – good luck blogging to you, too!

  2. Lily,

    A very powerful poem! “A jewel of grey as owl’s wing/From shoulder to skies above” is incredibly powerful and evocative. Fare took my breath away…

    One question to make sure I am reading it correctly. How does one pronounce “Ageha”? I assume you are not referring to the Tokyo bar or Japanese fashion magazine? 😉

    john

    1. Thank you! To be honest, I am not sure. It is a Japanese name but I read it as an English translation, and I have been wondering about which Japanese characters (and what pronunciation) it might use. In the meantime I just read it phonetically

    2. I can’t claim credit for this, my boyfriend kindly did the research, but Ageha is pronounced as we would expect from reading it. It loosely means swallowtail butterfly, and in hirigana it is あげは, while in katakana it is アゲハ

      1. I read it as Ah-ge-ha, but, with all those vowels, it could also be, Ag-e-ha or even, Age-ha.

        Swallowtail butterfly…interesting.

        If your poem is like the original, I can almost see a Japanese version of the Indian diety, Shiva, the Destroyer of Worlds.

        john

        1. Hmm good point, I’ve been reading it as Ah-ge-ha 🙂 I’m afraid your vision is more exciting than the original – he might have verged upon supernatural, but in the end he was only human and died after all.

  3. I’m almost afraid to say this. I have no idea what or who Ageha is, but the poem reminds me of Jesus. I guess poetry is about each reader’s interpretation. It means something different for everyone no matter what the inspiration was. It’s beautiful by the way. Graceful and flowing, yet strong and powerful too.

    1. I don’t think you should be afraid to say it! I may not be religious but from this poem now I can see the kind of parallels you must be thinking of, and seeing another point of view is always interesting 🙂 Thank you very much!

    1. That’s very nice of you, since I only wrote it last night I was hesitant about posting – as I will undoubtedly keep tweaking it. I think everything in your comment should be said of your poem, ‘Riches’! It is so sweet 🙂

      1. lly,
        Thanks for the very generous comment about “Riches”. In its origin it was much as you speak about this piece – and after much “tweaking” I left it in a notebook for a long time. Once you are satisfied with something, don’t hesitate, just let it take wing. You’re a very good writer and have a real grasp of the tools that make a good poem or story.
        Paul

        1. It was my pleasure, I loved reading it. I’d actually like to start doing a re-blog every Thursday, and maybe I could re-blog it next week? You make me feel much more confident – thank you 🙂

  4. Elizabeth, this is a wonderful piece. It brought me there and kept me there. That is the mark of a true writer, and true you are. I look forward to your next poem. 🙂 Eric

  5. Hi I read your poem. Wow, it does seem the same, no?!:) I wrote “Ice King” for my boyfriend who during that week was distant with me. I wrote what I was feeling at the time because I was feeling low- poems are my emotional outlet sometimes.

    I like this poem and this one stanza is really him:

    “Still he bends strong and fine

    Winter fox in gauze and gold

    Irresistible in dance of death

    His fury awful to behold”

    😀 Write some more! 😀

    1. Yeah it was neat to see the similarities 🙂 That may be my favourite stanza. I wrote this about a character in a story whose tragic end really got to me – I think I’ll be writing more like this as long as I keep reading such stories!

      Thanks so much for your kind comment!

  6. Have read many of your poems & like very much reading your particular style, individualistic & contemporary with attractive, appealing, archaic undertones; nice work…

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