The young King of Scarlet Castle
Sent his beloved companions
On a quest ’round Emerald Castle
For a noble bride’s affections
~
They came upon a stoic knight
And asked him for the way
But clad in plates of malachite
The statue had naught to say
~
Then they saw a graceful knight
His cloak of aventurine
But asking if the road was right
His reply was wind through leaves
~
So they searched the kingdom wide
Over verdant hills and vales
But no word of aid did they find
Among knights or stones or gales
~
These companions of the Scarlet King
Had little hope when they came
To an arch at roadside standing
As if an Emerald Knight to frame
~
“Sir Knight, we seek a maiden fair
A princess of your prosperous land
Our Lord would beg, our Lord would dare
Place this ring upon her hand!”
~
At this the Knight bent his head
And the ring did he long consider
“A lovely jewel, but why, good men
Did you not bestow it yonder?”
~
He turned around and pointed back
Along the road they’d traveled
And at their confusion, she gave a laugh
As her Emerald hair unraveled
© 2012 Elizabeth Cook
Love this, the fairy tale genre is deceptively difficult I think, but you have mastered it very well and created your own new story. Most impressed!
Thanks, I had so much fun writing this one. I think that for more and more girls these days the traditional fairy tales can be lacking, so I wanted to tease that a little. And of course there’s the old lesson that you’ll miss a lot if you only see what you expect!
I appreciate you visiting and commenting!
‘His reply was wind through leaves’ What a beautiful line.
Thank you! I was sort of trying to evoke a tree, do you think it worked?
It worked for me! Absolutely beautiful poem! 🙂
Yay! Thanks so much for reading and commenting
Yes indeed!
…. and a new wordsmith takes the forefront ! Lily, this is as great a tale as I’ve read for a while, and the ending was perfect !
Paul
Thank you Paul! I really look forward to your comments, you’re very encouraging. It’s funny, there are other poems I like more but I know I had the most fun writing this one
Lily
The ones that are fun are often the most interesting.
I love these poetic adventures you take me on!
Aw thank you, I’m glad to provide some entertainment! 🙂
Love, love this! The ending took me by surprise.
Haha thank you! I’m glad it was a surprise, a couple people told me it was “nice but obvious”
Lily
But sometimes obvious is very nice. Especially with a fairytale.
Hi lly1205. Thank you so much for liking my poem ‘The Journey’. Best Wishes. The Foureyed Poet.
It was my pleasure, I enjoyed it! Thank you for visiting!
Beautifully crafted poem! Lovely!
Thank you very much!
Echoing the well-deserved praise here, your poem travels beautifully through the metaphysical and mythical, with teases of Tarot, here and there. Poems of the quest are great fun to write! (And thank you for dropping by at Oceantics.) 😉
I really appreciate your comment, I’m glad you enjoyed the poem! And it was my pleasure 🙂
Lily
Very Cool.
Thank you! 😀
Wonderful poem! The imagery it created in my head was fantastic!
Thank you very much! I really appreciate your comment 🙂
Great poem. It “feels” like it could have been written long ago. Love your descriptive lines and verse. I am also old fashioned in that I really like poems that rhyme and have cadence to them.
Well done!
Thank you! I also prefer rhyme and cadence, so I try my best to write poems that way 🙂 I really appreciate your visit and kind comment!
Lily
Amazing! Absolutely love it! I do a poetry blog in addition to Arthurian Romances. My poems are a more personal nature compared to the stuff I write about the Arthurian legends. Feel free to check it out if you like. It’s JillNYC.com
Oh thank you very much! I’ll check out your blog 🙂
Lily
awesome poetry!
Thank you very much! I appreciate your visiting 🙂
Lily
You are really talented.
Thank you so much! I had a lot of fun writing this one
Your prose is interesting and fun, but (and this is my prejudice showing) your poetry is always absolutely delightful!
Aw thank you, John! I should get back to writing more poetry. I have actually been very busy (new house, major fixer-upper) and have been neglecting writing in general…